〈考研英语考前30天狂背作文〉7-1

文章作者 100test 发表时间 2007:02:25 10:09:07
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Directions 6

Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:

1. describe the two pictures,

2. interpret their meaning, and

3. point out the consequences for this phenomenon.

You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

审题：

在写作中，审题这个环节是非常重要的。在图画作文中，我们不仅要仔细审视图画，而且还应将英文的提纲看清楚。这篇文章配了双图，双图多是表示对比关系，这里是凸显的先后。提纲包括三个部分：描写图画、阐释含义和指出后果，这就了我们文章的结构走向。

Sample:

Two pictures above describe a story which we would never wish to encounter. In the first one, a large crowd gathered around a man lying on the ground. One person said, “He seems to be drunk.” Another whispered, “His head and hands seem to be bleeding.” In the second picture, a policeman is asking those who were present, “Why didn’t send him to hospital?” The first one said, “I was hurrying to work.” The second one said, “I was hurrying to school.”

It is quite obvious that the drawer wishes to draw our attention to this most unfavorable social phenomenon. Many people are used to finding all kinds of excuses to shirk their responsibilities of helping those who are in need of help. In their eyes, their own daily businesses are always more important than those of the strangers, even their lives.

This phenomenon will bring a series of harmful consequences. First, when people refuse to take care of the strangers, the danger of accidents will be much higher, because you have only a small group of people to rely on whenever emergency arises. Everyone may come across accidents from time to time, and mutual help will prevent most of them from being destructive. Second, the possibility of attaining a happy life will be much smaller. If everyone only takes his own interests into consideration in face of big events, the society will be full of selfish people. The social cost of achieving success will remain high before cooperation becomes a habit.

If any one of us wants to enjoy a happy and secure life, we have to be prepared to extend our helping hands to others including strangers, for helping others is equal to helping ourselves.来源：www.examda.com

点评：

这篇文章最终写成了四段，结构非常清晰。第一段分别描写了两副图画，语言简洁流畅。注意这一段不宜过长。

第二段是测度作者的意图，共三句话，第一句是一个经典句型：It is quite obvious that the drawer wishes to draw our attention to... 这句话直指图画所揭示的社会现象，后面两句来具体说明：先说许多人千方百计找理由以逃避帮助他人；然后原因，他们认为……注意段中句子之间的逻辑关系，这是非常重要的。

第三段写了该现象引起的有害的后果，该段的首句是个经典的模板句，后分两点来说明。第一点说明当人们不愿意帮助他人时，事故所造成的危险就会大得多，因为那样的话每个人能依靠的人（即亲人和朋友）是非常有限的。这一点的第二句话是个难句，展现了很强的句子内部的逻辑，希望大家用心。这句话的意思是：每个人都会遇到事故，而相互帮助可以避免大部分的事故造成毁灭性的后果。到这里，我们可以看出，思想是由语言表达的，要想深刻地表达思想，一定要多模仿、多操练。第二点是从更广阔的角度去问题，说明获得幸福生活的可能性减小了。社会充满了自私的人们，获得成功的社会成本陡增。

末段是结语——如果我们想要享受幸福的生活，我们应向他人（包括陌生人）伸出援手。

第二段的第二句中的shirk ones responsibility表示“逃避责任”。第三段第二句的emergency表示“紧急情况”。第三句的destructive表示“造成重大损害的”。第五句的in face of表示“面临”。最后一句的cooperation becomes a habit表示“合作成为一种”。

心得：

1．文章的结构层次一定要清楚，这是充分理解提纲与图画构成语境的结果。

2．学习写作主从复合句，充分理解句子内部的逻辑关系。通过本文，重点学习条件状语从句。

典型的条件状语从句：If everyone only takes his own interests into consideration in face of big events, the society will be full of selfish people.

嵌套原因状语从句的条件状语从句：If any one of us wants to enjoy a happy and secure life, we have to be prepared to extend our helping hands to others including strangers, for helping others is equal to helping ourselves.

Directions 7

Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:

1. describe the two pictures,

2. interpret their meaning, and

3. point out the consequences for this phenomenon.

You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

审题：

提纲包含了三个部分，这篇文章可以分为四段来写，其中末段是结语。真实写作中前三段可以与提纲有明显的对应关系，这样的安排思路清晰，易于把握。

Sample:

In the pictures, we see clearly a person who claims to begin his grand scheme tomorrow. In the first picture, he claims that he will begin tomorrow because he is not yet well prepared today. In the second picture, when tomorrow really comes, he again says he will begin later because he is not feeling well at the moment.

What can we say at seeing such pictures? We can always find excuses for our mistakes, failures and inaction, but how can we make real progress in our life? We will never ever grow up if we keep on finding excuses instead of looking directly into the matter, analyzing the situation objectively and taking action as soon as possible.

Delay has a lot of bad consequences. In many cases, we will lose the chance to succeed forever. Time is limited, and so are youth and enthusiasm. When we form a plan, we should always try our best to put it into practice immediately. We should not worry about failure, because we can always learn from it. Only if we keep on trying and never stop, will we make progress and eventually turn our dream into reality.

The important thing in life is to have a great aim and the determination to attain it. Without action, a great aim will be nothing more than a castle in the air.

点评：

第一段分别描述了两幅图画，独特之处在于首先将两副图画的共同之处提取出来——描写一个人说明天就要开始宏伟的计划，而后分别描述两副图画的不同之处——这样做的好处是使段落的条理清晰。

第二段的首句使用了设问句，一下子引起了读者的兴趣，而后自己给出答案——我们总是能为错误、失败和无行动找到理由，可是我们又怎能取得进步呢？这个句子中使用了平行的名词和反问句，效果强烈，非常引人注目。该段第三句进一步说明，使用instead of强化了对比关系——如果一直寻找借口而不是直接查清事实、客观分析情况和尽快采取行动的话，我们永远也无法成长。注意句中否定意义的表达：

We will not grow up if...

We will never grow up if...

We will never ever grow up if...

在上述三种表达方式中，我们可以看出，最后一种不仅语气强烈，而且极富韵律。

第三段先说了拖延的坏处，而后说了我们正确的做法。

最后一段做结，共两句话。第一句是引用了歌德的名言，而第二句是反过来说——如果没有行动，伟大的目标就只能是空中楼阁。

心得：

要想写好文章，就要先写好句子，再写好段落。文章大的结构的是不难的，关键是写好单个的句子后再将它们有机地组成完美流畅的段落。

第三段就是一个好的例子，这一段分成两个部分，各有三句话，有机地结合在了一起。第一句先是讲拖延有很多坏处，第二句直接解释第一句——在很多情况下，我们就永远失去了成功的机会。注意这句话的写法，首先，使用in many cases表示“在很多情况下”，显得客观，因为不是所有的情形均是如此。其次，使用forever表示“永远”，加强了语气，并且恰如其分地指出了人生的悲怆，点出了韶华易逝的真谛。第三句是对第二句的补充说明——时间是有限的，青春和激情也是如此（句子的后部使用了倒装）。第四句笔锋一转，说明我们一旦有了计划，应当全力以赴立即将其付诸实践，注意这里使用了immediately，是反过来与该段的第一句话进行呼应。第五句说明我们不该担心失败，因为我们总能从中学到东西。末句是以only开头的倒装句，说明行动和结果之间的关系，语气很强。