GRE英语考试作文点评:6分范文的构架

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首先是ISSUE部分评分标准：从最高6到0分。

　　SCORING GUIDE FOR PRESENT YOUR PERSPECTIVE ON AN ISSUE

　　GRE ESSAY SCORING GUIDE: PERSPECTIVE ON AN ISSUE SCORE

　　6 A 6 paper presents a cogent, well-articulated analysis of the complexities of the issue and demonstrates mastery of the elements of effective writing.

　　满分作文的标准：表现出对语言的把握(mastery)，对题目的深刻理解(complexities)，并且cogent。

　　A typical paper in this category

　　——develops a position（看到了吗，a position，要选取一个角度）on the issue with insightful reasons and/or persuasive examples （看到OR了吗，所以没有例子也可以，如果你可以congent并且给出非常insightful的理由）

　　——sustains a well-focused, well-organized discussion（关于文章结构的要求）

　　——expresses ideas clearly and precisely

　　——uses language fluently, with varied sentence structure and effective vocabulary （关于语言的要求的，你对语言的mastery就应该从这几个方面体现出来）

　　——demonstrates superior facility with the conventions （grammar, usage, and mechanics） of standard written English but may have minor flaws（这个minor flaws是建立在不影响理解的基础之上。）

　　1——Topic: Generalists vs. Specialists

　　Present your perspective on the issue below, using relevant reasons and/or examples to support your views.

　　"In our time, specialists of all kinds are highly overrated. We need more generalists —— people who can provide broad perspectives."

　　SAMPLE-1 (score:6)

　　In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing life complexity and psychological displacement, both positive and negative effects among persons in Western society call for a balance in which there are both specialists and generalists.

　　这一段非常干净利索的引出来题目的theme: specialist and generalist这个就是general statement。一些朋友拿文章出来修改的时候我经常发现没有一个引子，一个general statement。缺少这个部分的文章是得不到高分的.

　　Specialists are necessary insgroupsto allow society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate the masses of new information and knowledge that have come out of research and have been widely disseminated through mass global media.肯定了specialist的必要性。句式不错，几个定语从句套在一起。As the head of Pharmacology at my university once said （and I paraphrase）:"I can only research what I do because there are so many who have come before me to whom I can turn for basic knowledge. It is only because of each of the narrowly focussed individuals at each step that a full and true understanding of the complexities of life can be had. Each person can only hold enough knowledge to add one small rung to the ladder, but together we can climb to the moon." This illustrates the point that our societies level of knowledge and technology is at a stage in which there simply must be specialists insgroupsfor our society to take advantage of the information available to us.

　　Simply put, without specialists, our society would find itself bogged down in the Sargasso sea of information overload. （Figurative expression） While it was fine for early physicists to learn and understand the few laws and ideas that existed during their times, now, no one individual can possibly digest and assimilate all of the knowledge in any given area.

　　阐述的很清楚，语言也很简单

　　On the other hand, Over specialization means narrow focii in which people can lose the larger picture.

　　这个句子一看就知道快要引出另外一个主角——generalist了，这个主题句是对过度专业化的一个否定。

　　No one can hope to understand the human body by only inspecting ones own toe-nails. What we learn from a narrow focus may be internally logically coherent but may be irrelevant or fallacious within the framework of a broader perspective. Further, if we inspect only our toe-nails, we may conclude that the whole body is hard and white. Useful conclusions and thus perhaps useful inventions must come by sharing among specialists. Simply throwing out various discovieries means we have a pile of useless discoveries, it is only when one can make with them a mosaic that we can see that they may form a picture.

　　Not only may over-specialization be dangerous in terms of the truth, purity and cohesion of knowledge, but it can also serve to drown moral or universall issues.

　　出现了generalist开始展开并且将二者结合讨论了。

　　Generalists and only generalists can see a broad enough picture to realize and introduce to the world the problems of the environment. With specialization, each person focusses on their research and their goals. Thus, industrialization, expansion, and new technologies are driven ahead. Meanwhile no individual can see the wholisitc view of our global existence in which true advancement may mean stifling individual specialists for the greater good of all.