托福备考资料:T友写作范文汇总(二)

文章作者 100test 发表时间 2007:10:27 13:27:15
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parents are the best teachers.

For the majority of the people, they grow up with parents and are fostered by parents before their independence. From their infant time to adulthood, parents are the best guiders and teachers. I would like to explain my opinions in the following:

First of all, parents know their children most well. As we know, when we want to teach someone properly, we must know him or her first, then, we could teach them in proper way and be the most effective teachers. Since for most people, before independence, they spend their most time with parents, hearing them, imitating them, learning knowledge from them. This phenomenon indicates that parents are naturally endowed best teachers. Even for some people, after mature or independence, they still listen to their parents and ask questions and solving method when they confront with trouble.

Secondly, Parents wish their children have a good future and therefore they could eagerly teach their children in their proper way. No parents want their children to grow up to incapable people. They have their natural responsibility to take care of their children. They can directly teach their children how to be independent, inspire their children to do things that they feel interested, encourage them bravely face on trouble, guide them the solving method to problems, check their homework, etc. Thus, parents provide the basic needs for their children to look for good future.

Parents are unlike teachers in schools, teachers in schools have to face so many students in limited school time that they cannot consider every child effectively. Only parents can have enough time to stay with their children, know them well and be the most effective teachers.

In conclusion, I would say, the parents know their children’ nature and habits mostly and they are the most responsible best teachers. The unchangeable matter is that the great nature endowed them to be the best teachers.

修改意见:

For the majority of the people(most people,不要搞得太复杂), they grow up with parents and are fostered by parents before their independence. From their infant time to adulthood, parents are the best guiders and teachers. I would like to explain my opinions in the following: (这里标点用.就可以了)

First of all, parents know their children most well(这个比较别扭，感觉不怎么地道). As we know, when we want to teach someone properly, we must know him or her first, then(加一个and, then不是连词，and then), we could teach them(them在这个句子中找不到指代对象，前面说的是someone) in proper way and be the most effective teachers(删掉). Since for most people, before independence, they spend their most time with parents, hearing them, imitating them, (加一个and，最后一个并列部分)learning knowledge from them. This phenomenon indicates that parents are naturally endowed best teachers. Even for some people, after mature or independence, they still listen to their parents and ask questions and solving method when they confront with trouble.

Secondly, Parents wish their children have a good future and therefore they could eagerly teach their children in their proper way. No parents want their children to grow up to incapable people. They have their natural responsibility to take care of their children. They can directly teach their children how to be independent, inspire their children to do things that they feel interested, encourage them bravely face on trouble (to face trouble bravely), guide them (with) the solving method to problems, check their homework, etc. Thus, parents provide the basic needs for their children to look for (a) good future.

Parents are unlike teachers in schools, teachers in schools have to face so many students in limited school time that they cannot consider every child effectively.(unlike的句型要慎用，In addition, unlike teachers in schools, who have to face so many students in limited school time that they cannot consider every child effectively, parents have more time staying with their children.) Only parents can have enough time to stay with their children, know them well and be the most effective teachers. (删掉此句.这段理由不是很充分，特别是parents can have enough time to stay with their children,)

In conclusion, I would say, the parents know their children’ nature and habits mostly and they are the most responsible best teachers. The unchangeable matter is that the great nature endowed them to be the best teachers. (我觉得改成一句比较好，the unchangeable matter that parents know their children’s nature and habits mostly makes them the best teachers.)

总的感觉：写作可以，但是论证不够有力，论点在反复吟唱。建议第四段来个让步。
第一段：观点
第二段：理由一，例子
第三段：理由二，例子
第四段：理由三（其实可以可不写，时间充裕就写写哦，估计写的话这段也来不及举例了）
第五段：让步
第六段：结尾
ETS脑筋比较死，喜欢这种结构，阿门