08考研英语强化写作核心要点之评分标准及样卷

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Directions:

　　Among all the worthy feelings of mankind, love is probably the noblest, but everyone has his/her own understanding of it.

　　There has been a discussion recently on the issue in a newspaper. Write an essay to the newspaper to

　　1) show your understanding of the symbolic meaning of the picture below,

　　2) give a specific example, and

　　3) give your suggestion as to the best way to show love.

　　You should write about 200 words on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

　　2001年作文范文

　　When we use the world "love" we do not simply mean an attraction to a person of the opposite sex, which is a very narrow definition of the word. The picture below illustrates the real meaning of love, by stressing the fact that love is emotional strength, which can support us no matter how dark the world around us becomes. In fact , throughout history people of many different cultures have regarded love as the noblest of human emotions.

　　As an example of the power of love, we should remember how the Chinese people of all nationalities respond to the call to help the victims of natural disasters every year. Although their incomes are still low by international standards, people all over the country do not hesitate to donate whatever they can -- be it money or goods -- to help their needy fellow citizens. Moreover, they do this with no thought of gain for themselves.

　　In my opinion, the best way to show love is to help people who are more unfortunate than we are. We should always be ready to give a helping hand to those who are in trouble, no matter whether they are family members or complete strangers. In this way, we can help to make the world a better place, for ,as the picture shows, the darker the shadows of sorrow become, the more brightly the lamp of love shines.

　　样卷的评分和评语

　　Sample 1, Sample 2

　　给分：(17—20分)

　　评语：内容切题，包括题中所列三方面的全部内容；文章通顺，语言流畅，句式变化多样；用词面较宽；虽有个别不妥之处，但该生基本功较好；表达能力较强；长度符合要求。

　　Sample 3, Sample 4

　　给分：(13—16分)

　　评语：内容切题，包括题中所列三方面的全部内容；表达基本清楚，文字连贯；句式变化较多；结构与用词有少量一般性错误；长度符合要求。

　　Sample 5, Sample 6

　　给分：(9—12分)

　　评语：内容切题，包括题中所列三方面的全部内容；表达基本清楚；但结构与用词错误较多，有少数是严重错误；长度符合要求。

　　Sample 7, Sample 8

　　给分：(5—8分)

　　评语：内容切题，包括题中所列要点；语句尚可理解，但结构与用词错误多；有些是严重错误；长度基本符合要求。

　　Sample 9, Sample 10

　　给分：(1—4分)

　　评语：与题意勉强有关，但条理不清，不成篇章；语句错误多且严重；词不达意。

　　(注：文章长度低于180个词扣1分，低于170个词扣2分，依次类推。)

　　1、Among all the worthy feelings of mankind, love is probably the noblest. It is of the utmost importance to the human beings, Everybody not only needs love, but also should give love.

　　As is described in the picture, "love is a lamp which is brighter in darker places. " This is indeed true. People in darker places need more light than ordinary people. Maye even a dim light can give them much hope for a better life and progress. Maybe just a thread of light will call forth their strength and courage to step out of their difficulties.

　　For instance when someone is starving to death, just a little food and water from you may save his life. Or when a little girl in a poor rural area 0drops out of school because of poverty, just a small sum of money from you may support her to finish her schooling and change her life, you have given love which is like a lamp in a dark place where light is most needed.

　　So to sum up, we should offer our help to all who are in need. We expect to get love from others and we also give love to others so when you see someone in difficulty or in distress and in need of help, dont hesitate to give your love to him. I believe then the relationship between people will be harmonious and our society will be a better place for us to live in. (20分)

　　2、It is generally believed that love is a hot topic which is most talked about. This is true not only in China but also in other countries. We live in different countries, speak different languages, but love is something common to us all. But how to show love may be different with different people in different countries. This is something we should give more thought to.

　　As shown in the picture, love is like a lamp which shines brightest in dark places. This tells us a simple truth: Love is like a lamp. It is most valuable when it is most needed. For example, once I saw a foreign lady get lost in the street. She could not speak Chinese and nobody seemed to be able to help her. Though my English is not very good and I am a shy person, I thought she needed help very much. I asked her what she wanted. She told me she lost her way, so I showed her the way to her hotel. It was a small thing but she thanked me very much because my help was needed very much. My help was like a lamp in a dark place.

　　I think we all should be like a lamp in a dark place, showing our love, giving our help to others, even to strangers. In this way we can make this world a harmonious and peaceful world.(18分)

　　3、I saw a picture recently in your newspaper. There is a small lamp in the picture and a flame on the lamp, which is smiling. The lamp says, "Love is a lamp, it will be brightest in the darkest place." I think it shows us a vivid picture: Where and who need live, love is the noblest feeling. So I believe that we should give our love to those who are in need. If everyone can give his love to whom in need, then the world will be filled with love.

　　For example, in the countryside. There are millions of pupils, who cant afford to attend school. Some of them never attend school. They are unfortunate, but now there are many warm-hearted people who give help to the pupils. Of course, we can also show our love in many other ways. For instance. As a friend, we should help our friends when they are in trouble. There is a saying: A friend in need is a friend indeed. As a young man, we should respect the older. When we walk on the street, we can help the blind or old people and children to cross the road.

　　In a word, There are many ways to show our love. The people all over the world should love and respect each other. The best way to show our love is to help others when they are in difficulities.(16分)

　　4、Everyone may agree that among all the worthy feelings of mankind, love is probably the noblest. But people have different understanding of it. As can be seen from the picture, there is one point of view. It says that love is like a lamp, which is brighter when the dark is heavier. This means that love should be given to where it is most needed. I agree with this point of view.

　　Take my experience for a example. Being poor, I have to do some part-time jobs to support my study in Beijing. I always feel love from other friends and families when they help me either in material or in spiritual aspects. I love them and want to give my help to other people at the same time. But some of my classmates take their parents help for granted.

　　They never try to support them by working on the side. They have no idea of difficulties in ones life. Therefore, they dont realize the value of love.

　　As for the best way to show love, I think, first of all, everyone should be couraged and required to try to be self-reliant. Secondly, when one is in trouble, others should help him. Finally we should educate people to appreciate help from other people. Only in this way can our society become a big happy family.(14分)

　　5、As is shown in the picture, we can see clearly that love is like a lamp and the darker the environment is, the brighter love is. And it is no denying that among all the worthy feelings of mankind, love is the noblest. Actually, because of love, many people in trouble get help and encourage, so they will try their best to overtake the difficulty and look forward to a better future. Whats more, when others are in trouble, they take helping them for granted. Therefore, love will be found all over the world.

　　Several years ago, some areas suffer disaster because of heavy rain. The PLA help them rebuild their families. This year, Taiwan also suffer disaster because of the earth quake. Many people in our country do our best to help them.

　　It is necessary to take some measure to spread the love. For one thing, we should encourage people who have love and are happy to help others. For another, we should enhance the awareness of people that love is benefit for all of this society. Also I make sure that by this way, we have a brighter future.(12分)

　　6、In the picture below, in the full dark situation, a little of spark enlightens the dark. The naive spark smiles so sweet. It seems to be saying, as the caption in the picture reads, I am a light of love, the more dark where I am, the more enlighten.

　　Among all the worthy feelings of mankind, love is probably the noblest. As a matter of fact, all of us survive in a love world. We offer love, more important, we need love. I am a hardworking student that is specialized in Computer Science and Application. Once a time, I lost my mind accidentally as a result I 0dropped down from the downstairs, badly injured. But for my roomates help I couldnt live up not only in physics but also in spirits. I thank them genuinly. What I accomplished today party attribute to all of them giving me a hand to my school work. I hope I can live up to myself as well as my roommates.

　　As far as I am concerned, love should be showed by two means as follow. At the first place, we should keep a critical eye on others love showed to us. Of course, most of the love is good for us, nevertheless, some does harm to us, such as helping to cheating in exams. The last but no the least, we should show love hearts to those needing them. As we know, Hope Project is the largest love project in our country, we should pay highly attention on it rather than neglect. In addition, we should cultivate the awareness to help others in our daily life. Lets hold our hands to build our country filled in love hearts.(10分)

　　7、This picture tells us a reality that love can bring up lighting and light will make everywhere bright. Although the light is weak, it plays a great effect which will make people more firmly than before.

　　When I was at middle-school, my parent were both out of employee. My parent felt disappointed and I was greatly worried my future. Our life became very terrible, I even dicided to suicide. Our neighbour learnt about my familys conidition, and they began to help us. They lent a few money to my parent and my parent use these money to open a shop. They help me to study. My parent finally got through hard life. So I say that love is great.

　　I think that there are some ways to show love. You may give money to the poor and help the old do some working and give your love to the disable. The best way show love is from heart rather than from appearance. By this way those people who accepted helps will feel warmly. Our world will bright if everyone show love.(8分)

　　8、The picture imply that love is very important to the needy. Love like a lamp which is brighter in the darker place. Lets haven a example. When a person ,who is around us , has a serious ill and need a sum money to pay for the medical fee but he or his family cant affort it, well will make our efforts to help him. It is clear that love is important to everyone, in particular, to the needy.

　　It is well known to all, love is probably the noblest among all the worthy feeling of mankind, but everyone has his/her own understanding of it. As far as I am concerned, I think the best way to show love is our suitable help when others are facing with difficulty and need our helps. If we help others without thinking whether others need, it perhaps decrease others confident and at the same time take us in troubles.

　　As is know to all, everything has two sides. Show love properly will take effective function, otherwise it will take negative function. As a consequence, we should not only have love but also show it properly.(6分)

　　9、The picture show that love is a lamp which lead a bright light and hope when one involved in dark. In China, we can see many stories about love, for example, From newspaper we can often read about "The Project hope." There are many people delvate himself to help others. In remote country, some children cant go to school because no money. However, in other district, there are many people to provide money to help these children.

　　From this picture, a small light bright some area. We can read much from it. As a university students, we can do much, do best. We can study hard science knowledge. We should improve our from all kind of aspect. As long as we devote oneself to help those troublesome man.(4分)

　　10、The symbolic is a light, it will be more powerful when the circumstances is more dark. Everyone has symbolic and symbolic is a very good matter to us. It come from us and it can help us. The symbolic is not only a feeling, but also is a character.

　　Mrs Bingxin is a good writer with symbolic. She gave all she can do to the society, include money, book and her heart. She tried her best to help those people who needs help.

　　We should show our love to the people, furthermore, we should show our love by the best way. I believe we have to do is not only the word, but also is the action, not only the money, but also the heart. If all of us have give our symbolic, the world can change more beautiful.(2分)

　　02年写作 5分样卷

　　Look! What a beautiful girl in Chinese custom! She must be 20 years old, dressing some jewels and accessories. She looks like wonderful my college classmate only a bit fat. She is smiling like an Angler to me. How I wish to take a photo with her. Of course she is happy to appreciate Chinese fishion. Now traditional cloth are becoming more and more fisjionable.

　　Any country has her own national custom. Almost all these custom are beautiful. Some of them can be said perfect. The long history of China has given about to excellent vulture.

　　Today. It belongs to China, it also belongs to world, China need world, the world need china.

　　99年写作 0分样卷

　　According to the figures given in the bar charts, it took from the beginning of human life to the year 1830 for the population of the earth to reach one billion. That represents a time span of at least two million years. Then the world population increased rapidly, adding up to two billion in 1930. The next billion was added by 1960, only thirty years. From then on the global population was on the rise, amounting to 4 billion in 1975, which is another billion people in only 15 years.

　　There are at least two reasons, I think, for the sharp increase in world population. In the first place, the birth rate is continuously climbing in many countries, especially in developing countries. Generally speaking, people there hold the opinion that children dont cost much and when they get old enough to work they will bring in money and that when parents are old, they will take care of them. Secondly, the death rate i most developed countries declines steadily because peoples standards of living are raised and health care improves.

　　In may opinion, the chief reason for the population growth is not so much a rise in birth rates as a fall in death rates as result of improvements in medical care.