托福备考资料:T友写作范文汇总(三十四)

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36. Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people’s lives. (1) automobiles (2) bicycles (3) airplanes Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The most significant invention at the turn of the twentieth century, in my point of view, is the airplane. It has made a positive contribution to the economic development of the world. Meanwhile, it has changed the way people live. There are three basic reasons for my viewpoint and I will further elaborate them in this passage.

The first point that comes to my mind is that airplanes have tremendously increased people’s efficiency. Despite that more and more people are willing to travel by airplane due to its speed, day-to-day businesses also rely greatly on airplanes for its incomparable efficiency. For example, after airplanes were invented, the time to travel between Europe and America had been shortened by more than three times. Businessmen can take an airplane, get to their destination, have their contraction, and come back home in just one day. In today’s epoch when the whole ball game is about efficiency, airplanes certainly have changed the way people are living.

Another reason that cannot be ignored is that airplanes have make people’s dreams come true. Human beings had always hoped that one day we can fly like a bird. The invention of the airplane helped to achieve our dream. Thanks to the airplane, we can travel around the world in just one or two days. Suddenly, people realize that dreams do come true, as long as we strive for them. At the same time, people realize that we can achieve other dreams, such as getting in contact with life on other planets, as well. In a word, airplane is not only a means of transportation, it also has become a symbol of achieved dreams. It has greatly influenced the way people think about our fantasies.

Moreover, people find it exciting to travel by airplanes. To some extent, airplanes connect various places on the earth together. For example, when I first came to Canada from my home country where the climate is always very hot and snow is very rare, I was astounded by the sight of the snow-covered land. Since then, I have always hoped to take an airplane again and have another unforgettable sight of the beautiful landscape elsewhere. It is the airplane that makes people’s life more enjoyable and exciting.

To sum up, the invention of the airplane has maximized people’s efficiency, made human being’s dream come true, and provide people excitement and pleasure. It cannot be denied that the airplane had significantly changed people’s life.

修改意见:
还不错啦，5分应该有的。要继续练习，个别语句还可更精练。

1、第一段中的It has made a positive contribution to the economic development of the world 可改为it has contirbuted to the economic develpment....

2、第二段中的Despite that more and more people are willing to travel by airplane due to its speed, day-to-day businesses also rely greatly on airplanes for its incomparable efficiency 可改为 along with more and more people willing to ....

3、have their contraction 应该是sign their contraction

先提这些建议吧，自己多改改才能提高得更快