托福备考资料:T友写作范文汇总(六十五)

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, there is a debate over whether only those people who earn a lot of money are successful. Some people claim that money is the only symbol of success, while others believe that judging a person should not merely depend on how much money he earns. As a matter of fact, this issue is a complex and controversial one. There is not a universal answer to this question. Actually, the final judgment should be rely on a case-by –case analysis, personally , I have the tendency to agree that money is not the only criteria to estimate a person.

First of all, A lot of people have been considered successful in history, although they did not earn much money. For instance, John·Nash, a famous mathematician who originate the concept of nash equilibrium which is used widely in modern social subjects such as economics, is awarded the Noble Prizes in 1994. No one can deny that John is very successful in academic, but like many other scientists, he did not earn a lot of money.

Secondly, there are many people who earn a lot of money in history. Ironically, some of them are hated by people because of their large fortune and their greed. Shylock, a vivid character in The merchant of Venice, will typify these kind of people.
Admittedly, some people are successful since they earn a lot of money. People admire Bill·Gates because he get numerous money, which may be beyond their imagination.

In conclusion, Despite the fact that some people are successful due to their large fortunes the earned, there are still many successful people without large fortunes.As the reasons and examples mentioned above, we could safely conclude that money is not a only signal to represent successful.

修改意见：
First of all, A lot of people have been considered successful in history, although they did not earn much money. 改成这样可以使句子的重心更明确: A lot of people who did not earn much money have been considered ... For instance, John·Nash, a famous mathematician who originate 应用过去式吧 the concept of nash equilibrium which is used widely in modern social subjects such as economics, is 还是时态问题, 这些小毛病稍加注意是完全可以克服的 awarded the Noble Prizes in 1994. No one can deny that John is very successful in academic 词性有误, but like many other scientists, he did not earn a lot of money.

Secondly, there are many people who earn a lot of money in history. Ironically, some of them are hated by people because of their large fortune and their greed. Shylock, a vivid character in The merchant of Venice, will typify these kind of people.

Admittedly, some people are successful since they earn a lot of money. People admire Bill·Gates because he get numerous money, which may be beyond their imagination. 这段的中心意思是什么呢?

理由欠充分,既然已否定了题目的观点, 不如再列出几个金钱以外的因素,例如社会责任,个人的成就感等.