托福备考资料:T友写作范文汇总(十七)

文章作者 100test 发表时间 2008:03:31 11:43:33
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good neighborNeighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.
The loud rock music, and the noisy argument happen in your next door, and you just want to read your favorite book or even to have a good sleep. How do you feel your neighbor in this situation? After you have lived for one year, one day, your friends ask your neighbor’s name. however, you may see them only several times in a year. Are they good neighbors? Although these situations are in imagination, in reality, they exist. Good neighbors can create safe and warm living sphere. People can’t help ask what is a good neighbor? There is a board and vague question, but, in my opinion, good neighbor should be characteristics of basic conditions: concerned about other’s feelings, and helping each other.

The sense of concern about others plays a fundamental role in the harmony of the neighborhood. Residents enjoy their family time in their own home. However, the outsiders, neighbors those have their happy moment by yielding noises, for example, loud music, and KALA OK at midnight, or by shouting at home during hockey game, can disrupt such sweet time. In addition, the extent of concern about the backyard also creates the problems between neighbors. The garbage scatters everywhere, attracting mosquitoes that may be bring infectious virus such West Nile Bird Virus, and neighbors do not shovel the snow on the house side-road, leading to inconvenience to the disable people who ride wheels. The concern forces neighbor to turn down volumes and clear their living environment, and hence retain the harmony in the neighborhood.

Such concern about others can avoid the conflicts between neighbors, but helping each other can result in a safe and warm neighborhood. Your neighbors shovel the snow on your side-road when they do for themselves. They take care of your pets when you are not at home. They watch strangers when they see them roaming around the neighborhood. In turn, you do the same thing for your neighbors when you are in that situation. Accordingly, the neighborhood becomes more and more safe and warm. The help will extend out of the neighborhood. Last month, the battery of my landlady’s truck was dead in the parking lord. I though that she would call some friends or mechanists for help. however, half and hour later, her neighbor brought a battery for her.

Therefore, the judgment of a good neighbor does not depend on the reputation that purports the first impression but on their attitudes to others, including the sense of concern about others, and the extent of helping each other. Such characteristics can bring about a safe and warm neighborhood and eliminate the conflicts between neighbors.

修改意见:
The loud rock music, and the noisy argument happen in your next door, and (这里的and是否会引起误会，建议改为when或while) you just want to read your favorite book or even to have a good sleep. How do you feel your neighbor in this situation? After you have lived for one year, one day, your friends ask your neighbor’s name. however, you may see them only several times in a year (偶认为两个子句的关系不紧密，如果是我，或许会改变一下句式：One day, when your friends talk about your neighbors, you suddenly find that you almost do not know the name of your neighbors). Are they good neighbors? Although these situations are in imagination, in reality, they exist. Good neighbors can create safe and warm living sphere. People can’t help ask what is a good neighbor(没理解这个句子)? There is (This is) a board and vague question, but, in my opinion, good neighbor should be characteristics (搭配好像有点问题) of basic conditions: concerned (我不确定是否改为concerning更好) about other’s feelings, and helping each other.
今天先改第一段，其实很不错得说，尤其是结构，是偶比较喜欢的那种